Recently I have been studying Creative Writing and my time as a student of Waiariki Inst Tech is coming to an end.A bad end I think, from what a certain someone has told me, I'm most likely going to fail!!.Yes I know, shocking news. I will blame this on one thing, and one thing only.The illogical and idiotic teachers!, yes I know I am to blame for unfinished work, or no attempt at all. But the feedback on a touching poem I wrote has caused me to spontaneously combust!!
Here it is:
A picture to give you more of a feel to the poem!
(Above-Gerard Way in "the Ghost of You" music video Directed by Mark Webb(akaEPIC))
'The Ghost of a Brother' -By Wai Skerrett.
Dressed in green his heart aches.
They never really made this choice.
Along his leg the mud cakes.
In his ear his mothers voice.
His jet black hair and pale skin.
Everyone fill up the boat.
From far you can see the enemies grin.
Stuck in their throat, blood they choke.
Storm up the beaches.
Grenades they throw.
Woman's hearts destroyed like peaches.
Young boys grow.
His blood brother is at his side.
The cries they hear from the men they knew.
But his brother hit by bullet, he could not hide.
The men who were left were only a few.
He could not breathe his stomach in his throat.
It was always them against the world.
Blood covers his green coat.
They never wanted to work in this job field.
His face a mixture of blood and tears.
Dressed in green his heart aches.
Okay, so my problem was that my tutor said that there is an awkward transition between some of my lines, that's just how I write...I write awkwardly!!..second problem was that he said I should change the line "Grenades they throw" to "They throw grenades" he saying that it sounds better his way and that no one says "Grenades they throw" so why write it!!How about I would say it like that so that's how I wrote it!!He also said that I had no control of the poem. In saying that he also gave me some pretty good feedback on other things.I suppose I can get VERY hot headed about criticism to my work.
SO,
If I fail which is most likely! More than most likely actually. I have applied for a job at The Warehouse, which I'm hoping I get so I can start saving!. If I do get it I probably wont study next year, and will pay for art lessons at the Art Post. That way I'm getting my art fix and can start saving for my 18th birthday trip, art school(seeing as art is want I want to do,hard work I know!) and maybe even save for a trip somewhere else in the world!..
Even though it is highly likely I'll fail my course, I really do hope I get The Warehouse job, so I can save for some awesome things!!.. I know failing my course will make me feel totally idiotic, loser like even..I know the things that will come out of working, saving to travel and saving for art school, the total Epicness will outweigh those negative things from failing!
So I'm very much looking forward to next year! Other than the above highlights that I've mentioned.Big Day Out 2012 brings my favourite band! My Chemical Romance to New Zealand!!..I'm so happy that I'll get to see them for the second time in my life, first being in 2007, me being a 13yr old weirdo.
I will also like to let you know that I am happily addicted to Dr Who!!, I Love the 11th Doctor, at first I thought he was weird..But he has grown on me!
That concludes my blog, next time I write to you all I hope to be working and getting money, and I hope by then my sister,cousin and I have started making Indie films.
P.S:Steal my poem Ideas, and I'll steal your soul!!
Oh, and I'll leave you with these pics of my future husbands(and know this, YES I will have 3, when I rule the world!)
By for now.. The Mummy is on.. Its got Carlos Olivera(the character name) from Resident Evil:Apocalypse on it!!
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